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There is a child, wearing my clothes, and my skin, and my scent, but isn't me. Sin is like ink, it bleeds into a person, coloring, making you someone other than you used to be. And it's indelible. Try as hard as you like, you can never get yourself back.
Words can't pull me back from the edge. Neither can daylight. This isn't something to get over, it is an atmosphere I need to learn to breath, grow gills for transgression, and take it into my lungs with every gasp.
It is a startling thing. I wonder who this person is, going through the motions of my life. I want to take their hand, comfort them.


And then I want to push this stranger, hard, off a cliff.
I wrote this a while ago, then stopped feeling this way. Recently, I've started again.

TheWrittenRevolution
The safe question: What do you like most, and least, about this piece, and why?
Me trying to think of a complex question: Do you think the charachter involved is struggling to overcome something truly sinful, or that he is judging himself too harshly?


My questions suck D:
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:iconxerolien:
Xerolien Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I really love the sentence:

it is an atmosphere I need to learn to breath
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Tohroe Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010
Why?
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:iconxerolien:
Xerolien Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It roams a great amount of originality and the metaphor still stands crystal clear.
I simply love it for that, including it's meaning ;)
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syntheticSanity Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
1. i like"This isn't something to get over, it is an atmosphere I need to learn to breath, grow gills for transgression, and take it into my lungs with every gasp." personally.

2. i feel that the character is judging himself too harshly, as we grow we gain maturity, wisdom, and common sense and with our new found self awareness and perspective we look at the same things differently. growing up simply is accepting that we did stupid things in the past, realizing that we are going to do more stupid things, and of course knowing that we should try not to do similar stupid things.
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OrenAsher Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2010
I'm sorry that you're feeling this way, but I know I've felt this way before, too. :petting:

Thank you for submitting this to #the-thinkers :heart:
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Fozzymillow Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2010  Student General Artist
1st question: I like the first line the best, and there's nothing I don't like
2nd question: I think the person feels hopeless. He's doesn't know if he can be redeemed.
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Tempstrife Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2010
first two lines = thank you
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing.
"This isn't something to get over, it is an atmosphere I need to learn to breath."
So true.
That and the last 3 sentences are just awesome.
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Tohroe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2010
In a literary sense, they're kinda good I guess. Thank you.
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Mhm. Welcome. :)
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